Obese or not Obese
(An Outline)


Introductory Paragraph
· Begin with an interesting quotation or description related to Obesity or not Obese: It is observed that “Life expectancy for today’s children will drop by two years by if Australia’s obesity epidemic goes unchecked, the nation’s preventative health task force warns in its inaugural report” ( Melissa Jenkins, 2008).
· Define obesity: Obesity is a health condition where a person has an excess of body fat.
· You need to define what you are going to talk about. Otherwise your marker can't tell if you've talked about “Obesity” meaningfully or not.
  • You need to include the purpose of your paper/significance/why there is an urgent need to address this problem: a national health priority,demonstrating your understanding of the subject
  • (You will need a transition here)
  • You then end the introductory paragraph with your thesis statement, a clear and comprehensive statement of your argument in relation to the set topic. It prepares your reader for what follows, i.e. signposts how you establish your response and the arguments to be presented: obesity is a result of unhealthy dietary, genetics, and sedentary lifestyle.

Body Paragraph 1
Topic sentence for paragraph:
Obesity is a result of unhealthy dietary.
· Find evidence - like facts, examples, quotations, or statistics that back it up or support the topic sentence of this paragraph.
· Explain how your evidence supports the topic sentence, e.g. unhealthy eating refers to “Energy intake is greater than energy expenditure.”
Another example that shows dietary is...
· Find more evidence - facts, examples, quotations, or statistics that back it up or support the topic sentence of this paragraph.
· Explain how this second piece of evidence supports the topic sentence.


Body Paragraph 2
Topic sentence for paragraph:
Obesity is a result of genetics.
· Find evidence - like facts, examples, quotations, or statistics that back it up or support the topic sentence of this paragraph.
· Explain how your evidence supports the topic sentence.
Another example that shows that genetics is...
· Find more evidence - facts, examples, quotations, or statistics that back it up or support the topic sentence of this paragraph.
· Explain how this second piece of evidence supports the topic sentence.

Body Paragraph 3
Topic sentence for paragraph:
Most importantly, obesity is a result of sedentary lifestyle.
· Find evidence - like facts, examples, quotations, or statistics that back it up or support the topic sentence of this paragraph.
· Explain how your evidence supports the topic sentence.
Another example that shows that sedentary lifestyle is...
· Find more evidence - facts, examples, quotations, or statistics that back it up or support the topic sentence of this paragraph.
· Explain how this second piece of evidence supports the topic sentence.

Transition Paragraph
Transit to a range of effects, by naming them:
Obesity leads to a range of weight related diseases to individuals, costly burden to society and an undesirable psychological effect.



Body Paragraph 1
Topic sentence for paragraph:
Obesity leads to a range of weight related health problems to individuals, such as heart disease, diabetes, dental disease, bowel cancer and reproductive problems for women.
· Find evidence - like facts, examples, quotations, or statistics that back it up or support the topic sentence of this paragraph.
· Explain how your evidence supports the topic sentence.
Another example that shows weight related disease is...
· Find more evidence - facts, examples, quotations, or statistics that back it up or support the topic sentence of this paragraph.
· Explain how this second piece of evidence supports the topic sentence.

Body Paragraph 2
Topic sentence for paragraph:
Obesity is a growing costly epidemic problem to our society.
· Find evidence - like facts, examples, quotations, or statistics, e.g. “if obesity rates continues to grow, it will cost the public purse $7 billion by 2032” (Melissa Jenkins, 2008) that back it up or support the topic sentence of this paragraph.
· Explain how your evidence supports the topic sentence.
Another example that shows that how costly it is to our society as Australia is in the progression into an overweight society...
· Find more evidence - facts, examples, quotations, or statistics that back it up or support the topic sentence of this paragraph.
· Explain how this second piece of evidence supports the topic sentence.



Body Paragraph 3
Topic sentence for paragraph:
Most importantly, obesity can lead to psychological depression if untreated.
· Find evidence - like facts, examples, quotations, or statistics that back it up or support the topic sentence of this paragraph.
· Explain how your evidence supports the topic sentence.
Another example that shows that obesity related psychological depression leads emotional and behavioral concerns at school, at work and at home.
· Find more evidence - facts, examples, quotations, or statistics that back it up or support the topic sentence of this paragraph.
· Explain how this second piece of evidence supports the topic sentence.

Solutions
How to tackle the problem
Obesity can become a preventable disease through changes of
· dietary: discussion on healthy food groups, shopping habits…etc.
· lifestyle: discussion on physical and outdoor activities, becoming more physically active, limit sedentary activities…etc.
· what can government / community do (levels): giving out healthy lifestyle messages, education programs, advertisements, playground, swimming pools, health subsidies for gym memberships…etc.

Conclusion
In conclusion, obesity is a result of three main factors: dietary, genetics, and sedentary lifestyle. Obesity leads to undesirable damage to individual’s health, huge cost to the community and lingering psychological effect.

· Now you will return to your opening attention-getter from the introduction
· Then end your essay with a powerful so what statement.